suckerplucker: Thank you for your review, though there are some things I need to clarify.
L2: a calloused finger is one that has developed a thick layer of skin from repetitive activity - it also means a coldhearted person, but I meant the first one.
L6: There is no need to put it in quotes, because I am the one who is narrating it.
L8: His fingers are wasted because of his malnutrition, as mentioned in the poem, food is scarce.
L12: I understand this one is a bit confusing. He is deaf, but ironically, the only sound he hears is the buzzing of his deafness - the sound of silence.
L13: Maybe I should have used spine, but torso suggests the character to be anorexic.
L15: Perhaps so.
L19 & L22: Why not?
L 31 & 32: This suggests he is within this disgusting place of relgious banishment - a religous village has cast him away as having sinned because of his flamenco style of music.
L44: His family banished him from his home and stole his life.
L54:There are quotation marks to emphasise his speech. The final line of the poem is the guitarist itself, telling the reader he shall live on. The effect comes at the freedom of his speech, devoid of quotation marks, as if to suggest he spoke without my consent.
Thank you for your review.

This isn't to bad, but its really confusing, some notes as i go through:
L2: First off the adjective form here is calloused, callous means a cold hearted person. Second, how are his fingeres both calloused and bleeding? Only soft fingers get cut my guitar strings, and tough calloused fingers are neigh on invincible.
L6: This should be in quotes, otherwise you don't know wether its the children or you, the author who's saying this.
L8: How are his fingers wasted? especially if they are still dextrous etc.? and above all since they have such a beutiful occupation as playing a guitar?
L10: "Jagged strings" i love it, great image, dead on
L12: "That his deafness emits"- what does this mean? I understand that he is deaf, do you mean that his deafness is the source of his songs? If this is the case, you need to reconsider your word choice for emits. the connotation of emits is one of actual physical production. 'His pores emitted an overbearing stench' for example. Other words to look at would be 'causes' or 'inspires'. or you could re structure the line to something like 'that are born of his deafness' or something.
L13: Why do you use torso? Why not spine since thats whats curving? Also, is it curving like or is it curving against the guitar. Just imagry stuff to think about.
L15: Verve? quoi? it doesn't seem to fit connotationally
L19: Why are you using the conditional?
L's 18 & 21: I like the noises he makes, even if i don't know what they are.
L 22: Again, why are you using conditional?
L's 31 & 32: Whats this about forbidding, god, and sin? im quite confused. Is he deaf for what he considers a religious reason?
L 44: Who took his home and life? I'm confused here.
L 46: What lesson is that?
L 54: why are you all of a sudden in the first person? Why are you as the author now speaking? I'm way confused.
I liked this poem, even though it was a little confusing, i'm definitely going to browse your other work
zac
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Wow! That was beatiful. I'm not sure how to explain it! Are you a fan of Jerry Spinelli. This reminds me of Stargirl. It's just amazing.

Hmm...different from most poems I have read. You are truely an unique author and poet. Never stop this passion you have for writting for it always brings a light to my heart when I read one of your works...babbling...bah!
Keep writing always.
-Seras