WOW
I love this it's great
keep going
I like ebony, i want her to win and she sounds like a fox. describe dean a bit more, if they're going to get in on i want to know what he looks like a least!! i like any way, despite my perverted-ness
Loff
Xia xx

A great and stimulating piece of writing, the points that you have brought together to show that they are not exactly different it is just a way of life that they follow. Its there god given right, even if people think their actions are unorthadoxs.
Always
Keep up the good work

Very reminiscent of Underworld, i liked the dark imagery and the more sophisticated, edgy take on the vampire genre as opposed to the common crasse, B-movie standard. A good start and it shows promise, more chapters are awaited with anticipation!

Okay, good five first chapters, though you could condense them together and then add more action. You have several comma problems, look into the usage. This chapter has a few distracting typos, but it's the only one. Overall, this is turning out to be a pretty good vampire story, and you should update soon so I can read the rest of it!

Longer chapter is good. One thing though - the act of a vampire hunter falling in love with the vampire is extremely overused and cliche. I'm not sure if that's what you're setting up, but if it is, please change it. I would hate to see such an awesome story turn into just another vampire/hunter love story. If not, just ignore my inane babble. This is good.

Getting better and better . . . though your chapters should be longer. I like the dancing part, it's just not something you'd expect, I guess.

I like how you're doing this from the perspective of both sides, it's already adding to the story.

Hmm, this bears further reading. Onto chapter two!