cool.. where do you take creative writing?

This is that weird little play you wrote for that class isn't it. Um yeah well that was, interesting I guess. Really short. Um...yeah

Good story and plot, but it is a little fast. I would elaborate more, one minute Maya and Ryo are meeting each other then next she's complaining about work to him. All in all, very good play!

D= That is so sad! I think as some constructive criticism to give, you should build upon what you have here, draw us into Maya more. It could be very powerful! Great job ^^

that was awsome, i loved the plot and everything. Ryo sounds cute by the details. LOL! Anyways, I thought it was a bit rushed too. You should add more before the conclusion. By that Great Job.

that's pretty nice. i hope you got an A. Very detailed.

That was GOD, though it did seem a little rushed. I liked it, but you didn't explain what was so bad about the goggles.
Keep it up.

AH!
NO!
IT CAN'T END THAT WAY!! ::in tears::
Wow, that was amazing! I am crying!! You should write more of it! PLEASE! ::begging on knees:: Write more! I promise to love you forever! This was so excelent!
^.^ Nicky ^.^