it's so sad... ang lungkot lungkot mo naman pala xenia. :P

I think it is a beautiful story, I like the underdog caratherization of the replacement wife/older sister who ends up being there when the brother-in-law is down to help him, it's a story about loosers (but aren't we all loosers sometimes in our lifes?). But I would suggest for you to further develop the story and characters (at least the big sister - you can leave the young sister "missing" which is her real situation after all - and maybe the husband although you can just leave him like that to) turning it into a short story with a bigger number of pages. I'd like to know more about the feelings and thoughts of this replacement wife.Anyway, keep on writting. I liked it.Joao Paulo

It's good. Reminds me of a movie I saw in Hallmark or something. There were twin sisters and the same thing happenened. In the end, she had to give back her "borrowed family" to her sister.

Wow... I like it a lot. It's exellent, and thank you for reviewing my story.

you write well. the story stays with you even after you're done. haunting with a hint of subtlety and thrill. peaked my curiousity with the first sentence.
you got talent, Xenia. you have more?
-truelab

this is so interesting, from her perspective of seeing him with marks of another woman, to being that other women. The ending is very controversal, but I absoutly love this

Grimly depressingly, sadly real. In returning the favour of a review, I have to quote yours- Remarkable, touching.
~Charm.