keep going, i'm intriged (sp?)

A great start, please continue! I can't wait for more.

Laurel B.

keep on writing!ill be waiting for the rest

It looks great so far.

Write more!

GO ** YOUR SELF MY EMAIL DID NOT WORK SO ** ON YOUR MOM THEN SHE"LL BANG YOU

I like how you started this, giving not to much away, and then saying it. forshadowing is really good in the piece! it reminds me of interview with the vampire, but i think this has a stronger meaning to it! keeping writing it, i love your style of writing. -Salenaenachiya,

Well, what's there to say? You wrote five peragraphs of original fiction two of them having one sentence. As far as mechanics go, your perfect, I suppose.

Ooh... nice formating you got there. Though it says you've posted this, what, over a year ago and you STILL haven't updated? What's up with that? Meh. Would've been cool, tho.~kaz

It sounds interesting ... but then again, no one can *really* tell from the prologue. But continue! I like your style.

WOW! really interesting beginning. please update soon!

Ooh! Please continue! It seems very interesting, strange. I can't wait to find out who the girl is, and what her legacy is! Update soon!

Very interesting beginning. It really hooks your interest. This character gives the impression of hopelessness combined with some strength. Wee.

*hands two cookies to Namir* One for you and one for your friend. And you don't have to count the chocolate chips to make sure they have the same ammount. They have exactly thirty-four and a half. And don't even get me started about the circum-whatsists. I've had enough Pi this week to satisfy a hoard of grannies. X.x

I shall be keeping an eye on this. MA has recently gotten me into reading angsty stuff to gain more expirience. Really, she can be very odd.

Once more, fun job.

Mehehe...*is in super good mood*

This is definately well written. Your character is believable and intelligent. I can't really comment on anything other than that until the first chapter is up, but you do have a nice prologue here! Keep going!

Hey your story is really good! I'm really looking forward to the next chapter. So update soon!

Wow.. for something so short it's amazingly well writen, and it draws you in in those few paragraphs. Love it, honestly. You really should get the next chapter up sometime... that way I'm not bored and lost in my own stories. XD
But great job, and amazing start; can't wait to read the rest.
~Jedzi~sama~