wow. seriously.
I think the only thing you could do to improve this piece is to take out these 2 sentences:
"
No, that’s not true. It is only I because you’re
DEAD
"
Sometimes, suggestion is better. But that's just my opinion.
I'm impressed.

Really good. Very emotive. Keep writing.

Wow, that was really, really good.
You certainly can be a good author.

This was great and I loved it. You displayed the womans greif so perfectly and without going over the top. It's so sad to think that this has and still does happen over and over again. I really love pieces of writing like this but I rarely find one that I like. IrresistablePoison

Beautiful. If possible, try to avoid any words in all caps. But stylistically, I can see why you used it, and the mood you've set otherwise is really well-done. If you're only sixteen right now, I definitely expect to see wonderful works from you in the future. Keep writing, and don't get discouraged if you don't get a lot of reviews, or if an idea doesn't seem to work out the first time. Just keep striving to stretch yourself further in different ways, always be willing to take constructive criticism, and never give up!

Oh... Wow... This is good.. It's perfect.
Thanks for reviewing my story.

hehe..i'm such a sucker for these types of stories- not surprising, considering i can cry from watching 7th Heaven. Great story though; the beginning is a great hook and exhibits a beautiful and flowing usage of words. You should write more; there's only 2 pieces for me to read =(

This was perfect. I agree with the rest- it's not overblown or melodramatic, it's just true, and you captured the truth marvelously. Yay for you!
*Crunch*

This has got be one of the most powerful and moving pieces of writing I have ever read. The widow's grief and sorrow came across so strongly that my heart went out to her. Her pain and reactions are really realistic, and the way your words flowed were wonderful. I especially admire the line, "The war looms in our collective consciousness, a bloated monster, slavering jaws open wide, an enormous appetite which cannot be sated." Well done!

Nicely done. Very natural and very human. It's not overdone like in other stories of death i've read.

Wow. . . that was awesome. Very powerful piece of writing, with a great impact on the reader. The words just seemed to fire away at us. I think you confused your/you're in one spot, but other than that, quite errorless. Great writing. :)