That was so...forceful. I can't pick another word to describe it, except maybe "wow". That reminded me of my Bright Eyes boy. Yay for Infinate Smiles!

Simple but nice. Makes me thnk of the EvenESense song.
Val

I continually envy your abilty with rhyme and rhythm. I love the analogy you use here, too.

Good, but I think the second last line should have been shorter. Name and game are too far away for the rhyme compared to say and decay. I liked the theme though, very good.

This felt like two different poems meshed together. I was going to use that as a criticism, but them I remebered that Beck did a few lyrics like that.
Nice way to work off of the beats of a theme! You are really onto something!

Interesting to look at infatuation as only physical attraction and explicitly as a game!
Fascinating...

Wow, interesting...nice metaphore _. Lookin' forward to reading some of your other stuff to figure out your style.
*mwah*
TumblingKitty