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| Strands of Gossamer 2005-04-20 ch 1,   | I like the idea you are trying to create with emotions rather than the picture, but I think you could make the poem a little more visual, but that's just me. Excellent job, though I would make the meter fit better. I absolutely love the last lines, "Remind her of the thorns she bears ... From this agony nor can I flee, Because this lonesome girl is me." I would reword it a little, but I think the main thing is that your writing style is different from mine. Good job! |
| Burningskyfire 2004-01-28 ch 1, | That's really excellent. I feel like I don't even need to see the painting, because you've captured the essense of it. Your words themselves are open to interpretation, just like the painting. It's beautiful. :-) |
| Penny so Pretty 2004-01-26 ch 1, | wow!... this is so interesting! it is just so genius how you actually thought of something like this! wow... i'm speachless... --BM-- P.S.- R&R my pieces please! i feed on reviews! I'm the review freak from Hades! |
| amphetamine-003 2004-01-19 ch 1, | Wow, I love this! I can really identify... I love the end. |
| adarial ciao 2004-01-18 ch 1, | thanks for reviewing my piece. i really liked this poem, it sounds like this was an awesome assignment. i love the three different perspectives, and how they mold so well together. the lines, "I bestow this image no grief or cares. I have no interest in what it is she bears..." stuck out in my mind alot. great write. |
| mizu no kokoro 2004-01-17 ch 1, | HIYA! remember me? probably not, i don't make much of an impression on plp do i? anywasy, i liked it, very spiffy! Which means it's GOOD! So write MORE! ~Never the same~ |
| DrenchedDrumTech 2004-01-17 ch 1, | wow... i like very very much. It's not the type of style that i write and it really caught my attention cause it was different. I really like it. |