hm, i like this. interesting topic, and i think the rhyming adds to the tone. just one thing - by "hace" do you mean "haste?"
otherwise very good.

I read your bio thing, and my name is Caitlin too! Sorry, it's a bit of useless knowledge, but I just thought that was neat. Anyways, I'm supposed to be reviewing your poem. This is a very good poem. It's flows very well. I like the "Fate's destiny coin" Nice job.
~Arayuldawen~

m very interesting i like it

Try to avoid starting lines with And or But, they are weak starting words and the line is usually better sounding with it removed. Other than that very good job.