Woo! Silent Hill 3 shoutout! Greatest! Game! Ever!

Ah, so this is where that monkey thing came from in the other story. Got it.

I don't know if anyone pointed this out to you before, but it is absolutely against the rules for anyone to use a cellphone in a hospital. The radio waves from the cellphone can disrupt the...heart reading thingies. Something to do with heart patients, anyway. My mom works at a hospital and she's told me stories about how they'd had to call security on countless stupid people because they refused to get off their cellphones.

Mom: Excuse me, but cellphone usage is prohibited inside the hospital. We have payphones available, however, for public usage.Them: Sh, I'm too important to shut off my cellphone. Thus, go away, stupid nurse! Mom: The phones interfere with the [heart...defibulator...thingies]. By using them, you may be severely hurting or even killing a patient. Them: Just one more minute, okay?Mom: *sigh*...SECURITY!

Heh, a short play about cell phones, just for you!

Now, bring on the Bethany!

OH MY GOD! DUDES A FRIGGIN PEDOPHILE! "I'm going to spend time at your house, little girl..." Ugh! Hehehe.

I like this version of events. Bethany is psychic! Kick ass, Bethany! Kick the rude male orderly in the balls, while your at it!

Also, rock on with your disdainful diatribe on "the rising children's obesity epidemic." I hate those stupid "reports" on the news. Such a waste of time with their stupid yellow journalism.

Keep writing!

Oh yeah, the truck! Completely forgot about the truck. Are you ever going to explain why Green Boy can't get it back himself in the other story? Or was that just him posturing in order to get Jimmy to look at him as a superior figure to be obeyed? So far I like the other version the best, but this version is such a weird mirror to the other. Like the Stephen King/Richard Brackman books Desperation/Regulators. Written with the same characters and the same antagonist, but the almost-reverse of one another.

M makes me want to read the Regulators again. Tak!

Oh okay. Alternate universe, maybe? I hope she changes her pants. Poor Bethany. That just makes her day at school *worse*.

Hm, okay. So far this seems to be an earlier version of your most recent story. Are you rewriting one of your old stories as an exercise? Or maybe this one is different from you new one...I shall read the second chapter and see.

Yes, I am still reading!! :P And you can't stop me.

God, how many words are you up to? Excellent chapter...very short, but very perfect. It's crazy how into this I'm getting, but I can so imagine the movie trailers for this.

Jimmy is becoming more and more of a sympathetic character, to me. He started out as a sort of angry kid, but as this story progresses, I've found myself understanding more of why he is who he is. Your characters are all fantastic. ^_^ (I still love Bethany!)

Update soon and live long (wth?)

Heh, I'm not even going to yell at you for your comment about the "producing a bady story..." you know it's not true.
Anyway, great work!! I still am reading, believe it or not...I'm sorry, yes, I need to review more regularly...great to see you writing again.
Very great chapter. Jimmy sure is awesome...getting more awesome by the chappie. ;P
Write on!!

Genius.
Pure, unbridled, unrestrained, magnificent GENIUS. You'd better continue, man. Otherwise I'll sick an army of rabid arsemonkeys on ya. Just keep writing. Keep writing.

Yes. Yes. Oh, man, was this cool. And it's been... how long? *looks at calendar... whistles* Ha ha, just messing. Really though, a great bit of characterization. Jimmy met Bethany! Yay! They don't like each other! Yay! I hope this sudden relapse into writing continues. ;)

Don't think I ever reviewed this part. 0o; Sorry. It's all your fault for distracting me with "Burst!!"
Anyways, I love the way Renkle is turning out. Very pleasant surprise...but then again, you knew he had to be pretty damn cool, 'cuz even you wouldn't be evil enough to make such a powerful character a baddie. I hope. *gulps*
Go on!! I'm waiting!!

Christ, Renkle is...different than I thought he was. I'm interested to find out more about his purpose--beyond just getting his truck back, that is. And Bethany, I knew she was important somehow. Great chapter, keep writing!

Way to go! Awesome--absofuckinglutely *awesome*--chapter! The teacher--Gothel--*shudder*, I could totally see him, and the dead girl reminded me a bit of the little dead chick in The Sixth Sense. Bloody brilliant chapter, I'm so glad you came back to this^_^!

Alright! You put another one up, good for you, man. Don't worry, I won't get all excited and expect a billion more chapters, since you, ya know, *finger across neck*. This is a great chapter though, starting to get the same vibe from Malobueno now. Very cool.

Very good. R&R mine?