Want to hear a fun story? When I was little, my hair was really blond. My grandparents had a farm, so whenever we went to visit them, my grandpa would take me out on his tractor when he went to feed the cows. My dad came with us one time and told me that all the cows were going to think my hair was hay and they would eat it. I'm still afraid of cows.

Anyway, though, I really like this story. I love your writing style. The thing about his magic coming out and following a path or whatever is original. As is most of this story, I suppose, despite its Rapunzel-theme. I'm still wondering where the tower comes in to play.

Now I've run out of things to say and this extremely lengthy review has come to an end.

You write well for a 14 year old.

I am still entertained by this story. I don't quite understand what Vina's problem is. Okay, the seventh daughter has been born and Bard's guardians are missing. So, what this have to do with Rapunzel? I mean, is she going into intense training? Will she inherit magic that will go awry? Is Bard coming to stay with them? There was not much of a conclusion there, or else my brain seized up. The latter is most likely.

Yeah, and I'm comma happy too. Oh well, as to the chapter. Bard reminds me of a mixture of Oliver Twist and Garvoche from Les Miserables interestingly enough. I don't mind the writing change. It works for me, because you are dealing with other characters. And I have dealt with many stories (Published and amateur) that mix time periods, and this is the fairy world after all.

The cow was fun. I can see where the hair would be a major problem. Oh well, it is an entertaining chapter all the same and the bits are humor keep it moving well.

Shame on me! I have owed your a review in like forever!! I really ought to arrange the emails by the oldest first.

Ah, the terrible things I could do to this story. Still, it comes off good. I like that the witch is a young woman instead of some old hag. The reason for her not being able to have a child is a little off. Hey, witches can manage a nice little spell to get a man interested, not to mentiona, I have seen plenty of couples I am too sure how nature would push forward such genes! Anyway, I think that maybe the witch could be barren or some whatnot. Anyway, I'm rambling. And alliteration is always a good thing!

This story is hilarious. I know its been a while since you've updated but I hope you'll return to working on this some more when you've got the time.

Toodles.

You are really 13? Thirteen years old, and writing work of this quality? Surely you jest. . .
. . . no? Well, you are a remarkably talented young person!
Even the very first line of this story made me smile - "a small, dull kingdom, known for its fine produce and its lack of scandals". Very witty! I also laughed out loud at the description of Padd being scared by the vehemence of his wife's request:
"He was not a particularly cowardly man, but angry glares from pregnant women have scared braver."
I can tell that you have encountered that particular brand of "DO EXACTLY WHAT I SAY *NOW*" subtlety used by some women heavy with child.
Another phrase that I thoroughly enjoyed and wished that I had written was:
"Life was good to the two, but sometimes Mirlene's back bent, and Padd's face sagged, as if they wondered why it would not do as well for three."
Simply delightful!

MORE! mice! I wanna read more!! *hops around* I love the names and its so captivating, mice! *confetti* hehe peas?

i like this! a LOT! :) i love your writing style, it's very intriuguing...continue! :)

I liked this. It's well written, and I feel so bad for Rupunzel's parents. Having to give up their child! *weeps*
I actually have a poem about Rupunzel. It's all out humor. Keep writing.