Reviews for Starlight: Astrea's Story

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Sweet Child 2008-03-07 ch 13,	abuseI'm sorry to see that you've seemingly abandoned this story. And it was going really good, too. You're writing style is really good. You have a clear and concise way with words, and how you built up the plot is also impressive. So far, I really love Kelon. He's stayed level-headed, despite his high position. And that's always something to admire. I do hope that you haven't given up on writing this, and I'll be looking for an update.
sousie 2008-02-12 ch 13,	abuseupdate soon
LadyOdessa 2008-01-24 ch 13,	abuseThis story is so deliciously awesome. I like how the guy refuses to respond to her ^^
I Darkness 2007-12-05 ch 13,	abuseHELLO! Hey, I really like this story and I'm wondering when that hell you are going to update because right now tearing out my hair...and snorting like a bull, and I really can't describe stuff...so... please update before i send you random reviews or emails or stuff... and i'm kinda ty[ing with one hand and its my left as well... geez i'm good!
chocaholic92 2007-11-21 ch 1,	abusethis is a wonderful story so far. I read through it basically one sitting, and I just love it so far. Everything is nicely worded and the plot is great, in general. I understand how busy school is, but I really hope you update soon! this is a great story that deserves to be finished. Thanks!
StrugglingAngel 2007-11-19 ch 13,	abuseMuse! Buddy! How the heck are ya? Okay. No, i don't know you, but I know your little story here. I've read what you've written ten hundred times already, waiting for you to update. Do you want to see me burst into tears? To turn into a twitching, sniveling, snotting mass of human flesh becasue I can't get my fix of Astrea and Kelon? If you do, you're a...meanie head! Okay. Now, seriously, what's the deal? Are we tied up in the real world or something? Cuz if we are, please, please, please, PLEASE untie yourself, releasing that imagionation of yours. Rest your fingertips upon the holy grail that is the keyboard and meditate, letting the pent up words flow from the chambers of your mind to your fingertips and then the computer screen. Reelease the voices of the characters, let them speak to you, whisper their actions and guide your hands in the strange prayer they say as they move across the keys. Turn your eyes inward and renounce the outside world as you pray, imagining the world you have created in its place... Wow. Sorry. That's Psychology 101 for you! Anyway, I'm sur eyou get my point by now, so I'll just move on a little further and pick at another hibernating author. Hope to hear from you (in the form of a chapter preferably) soon! =)
bugger off 2007-09-04 ch 13,	abuse^_^ i like dis. hehe ... its getting interesting... ^_^ but is dis story on hiatus or will it continue?
Genato 2007-08-29 ch 13,	abuseplease update.
Dancing In Magic 2007-08-08 ch 13,	abusewow, this is an incredibly incredible story. I liked it a lot. It was really nice. It could seriously get published some day. Maybe even today, if you've got all the chapters done! :D
Fairytale Gurl 2007-08-06 ch 13,	abuseWOW this is amazing. breathtaking writing! please update soon! it's been over half a year! LOL! UDPATE SOON PLEASE!
Appollochan 2007-07-26 ch 13,	abuseWow, so far I love this story, I can't really think of much to criticise if anything. I have to say the characterisation is amazing. My favorite character has to be Xann at the moment, he's just so cheery, I can't help but smile when he shows up. I think the plot is developing really well, the whole idea of art, I think, was very imaginative and you described it so well in the previous chapter. The only real criticism that I can give is that I think he chapters tend to end rather abruptly, apart from that this story is brilliant.
Appollochan 2007-07-19 ch 2,	abuseOkay I've changed my mind, I don't want Kelon to get his ** kicked anymore. XD I really love the characterisation in this story and the world the story takes place in sounds very well thought out. Thank you for another great chapter.
Appollochan 2007-07-18 ch 1,	abuseWow, I really liked this, the pace and imagery were fantastic. If I had to dig around for something I didn't like it would have to be the fact that Astrea didn't win that duel, but then again that just makes me want to read further in the hope that she'll kick his ** later. As for improvements, I only caught a few sentences that I found hard to grasp, possibly a word order issue. Other than that it was amazing. I hope my review was helpful. ^_^
October Darling 2007-05-16 ch 13,	abuseIt's my first time reading your story, but I really like it. Its as amusing as it is interesting, and that's a deadly combo for me! Please update when you can!
No-one 2007-05-11 ch 2, anon.	abuseI've only read up to Chapter 3, but I like what I see. One note though, and a very minor niggle: thou, thee, thy are the forms of "you" you would use to an inferior or to someone who you're familiar with. So, it's fine for Kelon to say "I make THEE... my apprentice... I take all responsibility for THY safety, comfort, and health", but it would be very, very strange for Astrea to say "I accept THY Mastership... I swear to THEE my fealty, obedience...". Unless, of course, I've completely misjudged the relationship. But if as an apprentice Astrea has to show respect to Kelon, she should use "you". But yeah, otherwise, great stuff.

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