 Butterfly Radcliffe 2004-02-29 . chapter 1Beautiful job! I love the way you italicized the last line of each stanza. It made this poem even more powerful!
~Faith, Hope and Love |
 Anjeni Windsinger 2004-01-26 . chapter 1I'm with everyone else here: wow, amazing, awesome. The third stanza, though, was the one that truly blew me away. I was about to take a sip of water when I had begun to read it, and by the end I had yet to actually drink it. Incredibly well-written, absolutely phenomenal, I obviously love it. The two lines that really did me in were, besides every single line in the third stanza, were 'With tears in your eyes, I see you search for yourself', and 'You walk out the door plunging the room in ice.' |
 scarywhenhyper 2004-01-26 . chapter 1'Chill' gives me the chills...NICE PIECE OF WORK! its very good |
 Keep it 100 2004-01-22 . chapter 1Wow. Each stanza held that same chilling aspect to it. Truly incredible. |
 Jess Angel 2004-01-22 . chapter 1Amazing. Chill indeed. Deep and a wonderful pleasure to read. I enjoyed diving into this piece. Such a way with words throughout the whole thing. Clearly you put a lot of effort into this...it seems so nicely laid out. Kudos ^_^ Keep at it.
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Viva la writing!
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Jess 0:o) |
 Dirty Wallpaper 2004-01-22 . chapter 1...
you dont like this?
YOU DONT LIKE THIS?!?
this, this, this, ... MASTERPIECE~?
*sigh* dont tell me you are losing your good tastes?
moving along...i loved this, and it is most deifnitely going on my favourites.
the title was perfect, because throughout the whole poem tehre was this electric blue tinge to everything, it was like icicles hung from every word, like a fog surropunded every stanza,...it was amazing...such substance, such character...such cold beauty.
i just really loved this poem, it spoke to me, it cut deep...like it was talking to me.
"You hide your tears when you could wear them proudly"
great work, i really loved this and i think you should to. kudos! |
 True Illusion 2004-01-21 . chapter 1Another wow. Yet again. Heehee. You're wonderful. Awesome awesome work, please keep it up!! Oh, and I liked the reference to needles and colorless eyes. It really added to it. Great job, keep it up!! |
 Crelian2202 2004-01-21 . chapter 1Very nicely written, Personally I would drop the word 'but' where it starts a line. |
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