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| CoolBeans18s 2004-05-23 ch 1,   | Amazing.. this poem is so eloquently, your imagery so vivid, it flows so wonderfully... I'm stunned. This is truly a masterpiece. I'm in awe! ~ CoolBeans18s |
| destinee ariarti 2004-05-23 ch 1, | WOw...*nearly speechless*...the power of these words takes my breath away! I LOVE this part in particular: "Perhaps to defy the meaning of it all, or maybe because she never died. How could she, when she never lived either. Those meaningless days sidling past during the span of her existence deprived her of - she could not piece the last brittle fragment without shattering the puzzle." That is absolutely beautiful, a profound work. GREAT job, I'm amazed. Keep writing, you're very talented. *kacie* |
| Dancinggal5389 2004-04-16 ch 1, | I'm not exactly sure what your metaphors mean, but word words flow like silk |
| Willow Elandria 2004-03-31 ch 1, | wow, this is beautiful. wonderful language and imagery, powerful meaning... i love it. (umm... is it supposed to be related to chinese new year? if so, i think i missed that part... o_O) ~Willow |
| Lidless Eye 2004-02-05 ch 1, | Awesome... just awesome. Not much else to say here; I really really liked this. Great job, and keep it up. ~Lidless Eye |
| Anjeni Windsinger 2004-02-03 ch 1, | A bit captivating, innit? I was really enchanted by your words, so I got a bit disoriented when I read the last line ^__^ Anyway... wonderfully written, amazing diction. Very, very well done; there's a whole lot of power packed into your words. Brilliant write. |
| Kelpylion 2004-01-31 ch 1, | 'because she never died. How could she, when she never lived either.' Ach, how I loved those lines-simple, but poignant. The ideas here were complex and thoughtful, almost shocking sometimes-who says these things about someone who has just died? but then, she never lived...definitely a bit to cogitate on. |
| Hail the Warrior 2004-01-31 ch 1, | This is interesting. I like the flow but the message seemed hidden to me. I like the last stanza the best. If you could please read and review some of my stuff, I have on this site for about five months and have been writing poems daily as I have no life. Thanks, Hail the Warrior |
| WhiteRequiem 2004-01-28 ch 1, | Wow. just... wow. |
| godawful teen-angst poetry 2004-01-28 ch 1, | This is really, really awesome and resonant and wow. Although I have to say the last line threw me off a bit...^^ ~lyv |
| cosmo-queen 2004-01-27 ch 1, | Wow. What an eloquently written poem. The great use of words combine to form vivid imagery and a deep, meanigful message. Plus, I learnt a new word! M, phantasmagoria ;) Keep writing :) *cosmo-queen* |
| Jez-Arinn 2004-01-26 ch 1, | Happy chinese New Year to you too! amidst the sounds of kinsmen playing mahjong and baby relatives running about... i'm so surprised at my ability to be drawn by your poem to actually be able to appreciate it... ^^ you are able to use the language very well in this poem to portray what the persona is going through. the words used held a certain atmosphere throughout the poem that made it suitable and perfect. in two simple words: liked it. make it three: liked it lots! there... ^_^ ~jez-arinn |
| Ilsa Immerman 2004-01-25 ch 1, | Very lovely descriptions. I love your choice of words. |
| MR.SEAN 2004-01-25 ch 1, | Thats cool, Im a little confussed but I think I got the main parts! |
| Mime 2004-01-23 ch 1, | Shin nien kwai le! Happy New Years! ^_^ Yep, the answer to the riddle was the monkey! ^_^ |