Wow! I applaude thee for thy beautiful piece of written word! Good job. ;)

Very Lovecraftian, I like it. Could do with a little expansion, but it shows promise. I think with a little work, this could become more of the nightmare it could be.

I'd hate if that happened to me as well. A good solid start to what could be very interesting, although some points need clarification and theree are some grammer and spelling errors. (Happens to everyone. My grammer and spelling just sucks in general -dry laugh-) I'd like to see where this goes. Keep writing.