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| Pheobe Meryll 2005-12-09 ch 1,  | abuseI like the mythological feel of this story. All the names got a bit confusing sometimes, but the symbolism remained strong. There were only a few grammatic mistakes I found - 'lied' instead of 'lay' and capitolization of improper nouns such as 'immortal'...but overall well-written. It had a sweet, kind of sad ending, a little abrupt but not overly. |
| Darwin 2005-02-14 ch 1, | abuseVery interesting piece of work here! I am impressed! I like how you have set up the immortal court, and described the different seasons, and the dance between night and day! Excellent...I will be back another time! Darwin |
| Raven-Haired Rapunzel 2004-02-21 ch 1, | abuseI like this a lot! It's an interesting concept |
| Rieley Malleck 2004-02-01 ch 1, | abuseUh...write more? I really enjoyed this adn think you could continue it if you had the time and actually wanted to. I really like the descriptions and characterization of the gods and seasons. :-D peace kidd |
| Pidge 2004-01-26 ch 1, anon. | abuseVery nice Jess. I really liked it. Very well done. (Pidge who is too lazy to sign in) |