i'm not sure lost is the right term for the meaning...maybe the person's not lost but merely "home"...anyways...i think it a very truthful poem...from the perspective of the person dying.

good. pretty good. though i'm pretty sure i'm just imagining it, i thought the rythym sorta went off a very little bit *Shrugs* i dunno.
keep it up!
anyways, i got ch.8 up, and ch.9 will be up either later today or tomarrow afternoon. though most likely i'll finish it today.
keep it coming!
-Rachel.
*Every legend leaves a mark*

This is nice...and by nice I don't mean this is strange I'm serious about the nice good thing-a-ma-bob. Whatever, I have no clue whether you understand this but oh, well. I liked it.

Pretty good.

I like this. I liek the description in it...pale lips...makes me think of Hecate. Good job