I don't think u should write just for the sake of writing- we're all glad u had a good time and all but this piece is forced, it doesn't really show emotion and doesn't send out a message. Everyone writes for different reasons, but in my opinion I think writing should be about showing some kind of emotion or feeling u need to get out. Maybe it'd be better if u wrote about the FELLING of nervousness and fear of what would happen going into relief and hope for the relationship instead of just saying what happened, cuz just telling us what happened doesn't affect the readers in any way. People can relate to emotions better than they realate to a "day-in-the-life" of somebody. Also it's hard to tell if this is a poem or a story. Sorry this is a long review but just a few suggestions.