WoW!
I love this song and I don't think the lyrics sound bad at all!
It's beautiful and simple and in my head I could already hear a guitar strumming and I could picture what it would sound like - good job, keep it up!

Actually.. when I started reading it, it seemed to come with it's own music.. lol Dont know if it's the way you'd sing it with your guitar, but I think it's a really pretty song )