Mice Im so jealous of you, this is so beautiful, however the only thing going thru my mind while reading this was the song "little bird" and my friends doing a duet with it ~.~ ah im just insane, anyways, love this muches ^.^

Woah. That's really spiffy. I'll have to read it a few more times to really understand it, but it caught my attention. Good work.

Fascinating way of putting it; great stuff; I am not going to give anything away in this review. I just think that this is an excellent way to portray your metaphor.
Well Done
Keep Writing!!
F.C