I absolutely love this poem. The title caught me, but the words held me. Wonderful job.

-searchlight

I like the simplistic essence of this poem. I would like to see more descriptions of the planets, and have it tie in more to the poem.

I see that it is linked through Mercury, Pluto and Jupiter, but it still is lacking that one link of a connection, considering that mercury is also an element.

I like it, though. I'd love to see a revised version of this.

Good job.

-Suchikri

Good, emotion-filled piece. Not much flow or rhyme, but that seems to work in this one. I like it a lot.

Keep writing; keep it up!

Wow...very powerful poem. I love it...keep writing!

OMG! That was awesome! Especially loved the ending! Nice! Keep up the awesome work! -QOTU

nice
a few of the lines represent the emotional turmoil within me now. Keep it up

I hope others also see the connection between using something as distant and "detached" (should you choose to personify it) as Mercury in the poem. A wise decision that must be commended!

You are really good and you have talent. i also liked your diography. i noticed that you have feelings when you are writing and i would like to compliment you with that. don't let anything stand in your way of faith- moonvine.

This is so beautiful. Your descriptions are so detailed. I love it. Some day I hope to become as good of a writer as you. Truly wonderful. Keep writing!

Whoa, very powerful indeed. Good angst and I especially loved the last stanza, and the last line! Keep on!

cool poem and expressed well

Sad. Very sad. *tear*

Wow--this is very powerful. I don't know what to say without lapsing into the cliche things, but this was really very powerful. I especially liked the two last stanzas-definitely my favorite.
I've read your bio. You're a hardcore Christian? That's cool. I'm not myself, but I am a "hardcore" (that's not quite how I would describe it, but I can't think of a better word) Muslim, and I also respect other faiths. Sometimes it's crazy how intolerant some people are.
-Linnet

I like your imagery of mercury tears, and how that relates to the planets in the third stanza.
I also really like your ending.
The bullets are really good too.
Good work.
- Jennacharm

Wow... Need I say more, sure Excellent piece!
Needa S.