the second stanza is my favorite.. great poem

This is a well written poem here. I found your page when I was reading AAron's work, I am glad you liked his work. He has a few more up on his diary-x journal. I as well have new material as well -- it might not be posted as often on here but the journal at diary-x is a good place to look. I have a new fan fic but it is more original than anything -- titled "Sherlock Holmes & The Case of the Great Old Ones."

lost to life, sounds like the story of my life. the flow is ok and the poem is good.

"The cold blue plastic heap,
called my college seat.
Cradles infertile hopes and all of my aspirations.
(It’s such a pain in the **, really.)"
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I really like those four lines for some reason.
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Keep writing.
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~Namir Swiftpaw