how sweet! sad but sweet, what the heck? since when do militia have strategy? i thought they just fired like idiots into a crowd..lol i loved it!! you are terrific!loved it almost as much as i love you

awesome awesome!! i dunno why i still review you know i love your stuff, it just gets better as it all comes together, buddy!!love, me

how sad! now there are like no women for that family, the son and the dad died.. darnet. a lot of gore..but its coming together nicely

i seriously thought there for a minute that you were going to kill off alan. i mean why not. its typical in a story like this. But it was good. I loved it. Your very talented. cant wait for the sequel.

Nice story for young writer and good action you written. Write more

i love it. its wonderful. you need to write more and faster...much faster...there is more right? better be more soon cuz i really need to know what happens to alan!

I said I'd read it, and I deliver...but I couldn't get very far with the format. I will help you out and reread it. The first two chapters seemed good, though, as I could read them. From what I could see, this will turn out to be a good story once the formatting bugs are squashed. Good job.

that was really sad! it was well written but very very sad..jeesh..but hey its a war story, ** happens..

i liked it, it was really really good. but then again i like all your chapters..its so great that his wife if pregnant..i just hope we doesnt get killed of because normally, in war movies or books soon after they say something like "my wife is pregnant, or my wife just had a baby, or i am engaged, or even i just got married" they die. and i will cry, youve got me caught up in this story, type faster!!

i really like how at the end of the chapter, you find a way to keep the reader wondering on to the next chapter..thats good, its like cliffhange..isnt alan your middle name??love,me

The harsh realities of war... ok yeah... to realistic for my wholesome little mind ;) but still great, can't wait to read more Davis..
pepper

Nice relistic story and like your two chapters are nicilly passed. write more

Again Davis its WONDERFUL! keep up the writting...um yeah...
pepper

I really enjoyed the second chapter, even more than i enjoyed the second chapter! I really like this story, keep it coming...Whats with this guy and his wife having quickies? Always right before he has to go to work!

i love this story!! the wife sounds hot..and i love the plot its really really great!and i like the word usage