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HentaiZaru 2008-09-01 ch 27,	abuseI am so angry with Shumba it's not even funny. I wish Ryunne would just pounce on him when he's weak. Whenever the couples are separated, something bad happens. Is that deliberate? Update soon!
Rialet 2008-08-31 ch 27,	abuseThat was more than worth waiting for. I'm so very pleased with it. Shumba and his attempts at restraint entertain me to no end, becuase it's such a juxtaposition to his normal character. At the same time, it's wonderful that it's there, as it makes him much more 3d. Not that he wasn't before, but ...character development. Yay. I think Ryuune will eventually get impatient, and jump Shumba himself. Lol. Wouldn't that be irony. Shanza and Ikeda are, as ever, sickinginly sentimental (in a good way, of course.) And Rigga! And Kaezik! I'm worried about them. I hope we get to see them getting better (and together) soon. Anyways! Wonderful chapter, can't wait to read more, email me if you ever get bored and wish to chat.
I.F. 2008-08-30 ch 27, anon.	abuseThank you for updating (and thank you for the early snippet)!! The couples are getting closer!! I can't wait for your next update and I'm glad that you are already working on it. Good luck on the next chapter!
Silver Daratraz 2008-08-29 ch 27,	abusethe two lovebirds have a fight! I wonder if they will forever be forever interupted when things start getting steamy? And Shamba And Ryuune...and saving our lost pirate! Update ...soon!
ChibKo 2008-08-29 ch 27, anon.	abuse:3 Seeing as I already got the chance to read part of this chapter much earlier on your lj (and commented on it cough)... The first part is a tease yet I still love it. The second part has me worried. I mean, blind?! But the last part... Too young? For how long? grin*
Kyobouryuu Arashi 2008-08-26 ch 8,	abuseHe doesn't so much need a gem as to increase his power though that would be useful. He needs a gem that can resist the force being channelled through it and not shatter. Here is hoping the onyx works :D PS... I liked the idea of them being silver more than the idea of them being gold for two main reasons. It wwas unassuming and suited his charatcer and I happen to like the colour far more. I'm nto a fan of gold unless it's white gold. Either way brilliant story!
ladyleingagain 2008-08-25 ch 27, anon.	abuseAH! UPDATE AND I DIDN'T EVEN KNOW?!?!? HOW COME! THIS IS PURE AWESOMENESS AND HAS LIGHTEN MY DAY CONSIDERABLY (lol dont even know if i wrote that right XD) ILU! HEHEHEHEHEHEHEHEHHEHEHEHEHEHEHEHEH, SHUMBA AND RYUNNE! loves XD I LOVE THEM SO MUCH! ALWAYS DID!! BUT THIS CHAPTER? THIS MADE ME CRAZY ABOUT THEM, I MEAN AW! they're so adorable (and hot in a way ;) ) together! HAHA, ah shumba, shumba... love the angst with ryunne's age and all. XD HAHAHA I laughed a LOT in this chapter loves It was full of awesomeness and and... inkyness!! I miss your writing so so much, and I'm so glad you updated and omgitwassoshort! e!! I love the part when Shumba woke up with Ryunne's thigh on his... ahem, thing. I got seriously giggly! And I'm sure sure sur Shumba had a hardon. and that he has it everytime Ryunne looks at him! HAHA!! I love them, they're so awesome, and i don't really care that ryunne's sixteen. I'm sixteen, and I wish I had my own Shumba, aahaa!! XD Like, a Dae Eun (the gymnast) or something. I bet Haedkel knows about Ryunne's feelings for SHumba and vice versa!! I'm gonna miss her. And Shanza and Ikeda were so mushy and adorable, and aw... they're so levely together, and Ikeda should know that Shanza loves everything bout him. It's pretty obvious. hits Ikeda one the head Idiot. I'm pretty freaked out and scared for Kaezik. I hope hope hope that this Nera person (person, right?) will know what to do. And that he'll heal from the dragon/phoenix thing. Sherak seems hot though! And ZethusxDezra is pure pure awesomeness. though Zethus is VERY hard for me to draw (BEARD!! It's like your worst enemy when you draw like me. manga style I mean. XD) This chapter made me realise that I have to reread Rotd again! XD But the best part about this? SHUMBA AND RYUNEE! (so sorry Shanza/Ikeda) Your writing is serious brilliantness. I love the way you write so so much. love Will email you soon!! :D! LOTS OF LOVE
ladyleing 2008-08-25 ch 27, anon.	abuseAH! UPDATE AND I DIDN'T EVEN KNOW?!?!? HOW COME! THIS IS PURE AWESOMENESS AND HAS LIGHTEN MY DAY CONSIDERABLY (lol dont even know if i wrote that right XD) ILU!
crystal-chan 2008-08-23 ch 27,	abuseLOVE! Oh dear Lord, this was worth the wait! Inky, I adore you. :) Poor Kaezik. I hate that he's so out of it. I can't wait for him to get better so he can get Rigga back. Rigga wasn't in the chapter again... Yup. Magical water that makes you invisible! So what's Shumba gonna do when he has to leave Ryunne behind? Gack! I so wanted him to just give up and make out with Ryunne already! Actually, he'll break Ryunne's heart by not confessing, then Shanza will find out, and kick Shumba's ass for hurting his little brother. Shumba doesn't understand; he's in more danger if he DOESN'T reciprocate Ryunne's feelings. :) Update soon! (Er!)
The-Tricky-Candlesticks 2008-08-22 ch 27,	abuseOh, Inky, it's me, Sixpence. I'm also The-Account, cause I've switched accounts... Just so you know. Sherak... you know, when you said he had the diamond branded on his neck, wasn't he that guy Shumba was talking about? The one who sang beautifully until the purging, when they branded his throat? Or maybe I'm just crazy, but I had a feeling he was important... The entire situation with Kaezik is just insane, as well... Seriously, "Tell me you love me," sends shivers down my spine. Just thinking about it does, even though it wasn't really mentioned in this chapter. But, uh, Ikeda needs to do just that to Shanza. Which makes me nervous for the whole crew, because if Sherak and Dezra all think they're in Nera... Whoo. Once Ikeda finds out what happened to his brother, and likewise - it'll be bad. And Riga... But Holy Gobstoppers - Shumba's thought process makes me keel over laughing. Just jump Ryuune already! Shanza will give you his blessing, Shumba, jeez! Although, this line: Especially when they were directed at such a young brother of his charge and benefactor, who had a history of tipping over the brink of sanity when seeking vengeance." Made me laugh so hard. Oh my gosh, if Shanza heard him say that... I love it, Inky, I do. You had better make good on your promise to not let it go for more than a year again! And e-mail sometime, would you? ^_^
NLP 2008-08-22 ch 27, anon.	abuseYay for updates! ::grins:: I'm really glad this story's not dead. And yes, this chapter certainly resolved most of the issues I had with the relationship. They seem healthier now, as people, and it makes me very very happy. Also, I'm really really curious as to why there was a wave of heat in the backlash from trying to heal Kaezik's eyes this chapter- was it the dragon fire, or something to do with his own strangeness? Phoenix-related things, for instance...?
Pink Raine 2008-08-22 ch 27,	abuseso i was shocked out of my mind to see an update in my inbox for this story. i honestly thought you'd had enough of it. well good chapter as always but kinda slow although that could be because the update was so long in coming. alright i'm struggling to find something to say. i seem to ave lost some enthusiasm for this, sorry. i still want to see riga again so all is not lost. see ya.
Hikaru Kosuzaku 2008-08-21 ch 27,	abusesighs exasperatedly Well, it's about time. It only took you a year cough or more, this BUT: this was an amazing chapter. My only misgivings are the lack of Kaezik (who didn't have nearly enough time) and of Riga. rolls eyes And if he doesn't show up by chapter 29, I'm sending out my cyber-ducks to hunt you down. Loves to you and yours, Inky. You've made my day.
Nikerymis 2008-08-21 ch 27, anon.	abuse::flails at you:: (Also, far, far too lazy to try and come up with my FP password.) ::flails at you s'more:: Shumba and Ryunne! They make my heart hurt, gah. Though I totally understand Shumba's reasoning. Fifteen is young. You'd think that, given their harsh environment and the very likely shorter life spans, that Ryunne's age at fifteen wouldn't really be that much of a deal-breaker. I'd think it would be more that he's the "Serpent's brother" that dissuaded Shumba. That said, it's good they're going back. ^__^ I have no doubt that'll be an interesting reunion, and now I'm super curious about the dragon (the animal, not Ikeda ^__~). Who would be able to control a dragon to make it attack Ikeda? And who would be able to arrange it so that Shumba was out of the way? And the stealing of the eyes bodes badly for Shanza (because I'm sure you didn't throw that in there for your health). Speaking of Shanza... damn that was courageous of him. And compelling too. ^_^ Also, progress! They got all the way naked! ::beams:: Even if Ikeda didn't have the energy to take advantage of it. That will change, though I wonder what occasion is actually going to prompt them to say those three little words out loud rather than thinking them vehemently at each other. Kaezik... good lord woman, you're driving me nuts with him. Wounds that a healer can't touch? A mysterious pirate healer who looks uncannily like Shumba? Nera is where they determine who comprises the Serpent, Phoenix, Dragon, and Lion, correct? I can't really recall, but I'm sure it's mentioned somewhere for me to find as I re-read. And really, that's just the tip of the iceburg. ^__^ I am super-ultra pleased that you updated! ::glomps:: Good to see college isn't totally consuming your soul (just most of it?).
Awe 2008-08-21 ch 27,	abuseAN UPDATE. AN UPDATE. YAY IT IS AN UPDATE. ahem XD Heh, Shanza going from numb, to miserable, to ANGRY in the space of a few paragraphs was awesome. And it was great to see how Shanza grew to be able to do that--you know, not just stay in the miserable stage. bonks Ikeda on the head You are being dumb. Every action so FAR has been disgust? Um. So? This is Shanza, who is not every else. You said so yourself, Ikeda, when you were talking to Viya all those ages--I mean weeks- ago. Also, the fact that he's your partner and reacting well? Er, that's sort of really important BECAUSE he's your partner. Dummy. (I think the bit about taming the "very fires of the sun" is just a tad over-dramatic though, perhaps?) Shanza /would/ be mortified XD XD (I like the transition there) Kaezik drama oh no! And Sherak I like, I think, though is he Shumba's friend then, or brother? Because of the looks...eh. What mark does Sherak have that makes him stand out-ish a bit, I wonder. Hmhmhm... About the part where Shumba is observing Ryunne and his, ah, placement, I think 'curled' might not be the right word. An entire body can be curled, but just a leg? Draped was good, but you used it already. Let's see...what about 'splayed'? Or something...hrm. Also, poor Shumba. Also, I think I might have to record Ryunne's wake-up conversation with Shumba for you. To share, maybe, even. "Shumba made an interesting garbled noise, as if he's swallowed a duck" As if HE'D swallowed a duck, maybe? And d'aw they are so awkwardly cute. I must say though, Shumba's all worried about being the pervert wanting the 15-year-old, but what about all of US, who WANT them to finally get together? XD; we are all at least just as bad! In short, SHUMBA AND RYUNE. And, you know, er, everyone else. Talk to you soon! Maybe! XP

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