Beautiful. I love the imagery. *adds to faves*

Your poetry is always very deep. And this is no exception. Beautiful use of words. Very good.

~ Noelle ~

Brilliant. You blended this poem wonderfully. I really love it.

Brilliant. The format is BEAUTIFUL. The images, the personification...the *feel*. SO MUCH PRETTY. XD This is on my favorites. And on my wall.
-Arii ._o

Ah, this is so beautiful... Each haiku fits so perfectly with the other, blending together nicely. 'Wingtips moccasin soft...' Hope you don't mind if I burn that into my head because I love how you phrased that so much. Brilliant write.

Woa- coolness. The unitalicized haiku is powerful; especially the end. Both blend together beautifully. Good job.

I hope you aren't hurt that it took me this long to review. I was writing a special surprise for you, and didn't want to review until it was finished. (It was the ending I had a hard time writing, until I worked on it during Calculus. ^^;) I am very pleased with the poem, so I think you will like it even more. I hope it makes you feel as good as you made me feel. Thank you.
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^^; And now, to actually talk about the split haiku. I have never seen that variant before. It is very beautiful took look at, and even more when reading it. Simply superb.

beautiful, mime, I love it.

This is beautiful! The imagery is so vivid, it paints this beautiful picture... So lovely.. so wonderful.. I liked the title especially! I'll have to try writing one of these - its such an interesting format!
~ CoolBeans18s

Ah...Mime so pretty...^_^ Can't describe prettiness...
- Dai Dai xx

This is really neat. I should try this kind of haiku sometime... sounds fun to write. =) Keep up to greatness!
~Lidless Eye

Oh! I love this! It took a little while to digest it fully...but it's worth it!

great imagery

Oh this is lovely! And spliced, yess! I really like how you formatted it so they all run together, as opposed to setting them off like I usually do...I'll have to try it sometime. The words are so beautiful here, I love love this. On my favorites, now.
~lyv
p.s.
first line (and title) are my favorites

wonderful spliced haiku poem. i should try one. i like this a lot. well written, vivid imagery. simply beautiful piece. nice personification as well. i like this format a lot. great job. keep writing!