O_o. This story sounds very interesting ... Haha, when I read about her 'complaining' about her siblings, it kindof reminded me about ... me ... when I was younger that is. The narrative style is pretty good, and the words are concise, conveying your ideas clearly in a few words - which is good =D Admirable trait in a writer, since I think verbosity is a horrendous waste of ink (in this case ... pixels?) and space.

You have a natural flow to the way you write. It is a pleasure to read a natural artist at work, your story flows and yet still captures the girls feeling and I feel the whole story carries honesty!
Would you take a look at some of my work and tell me what you think?
Thank you Maria