Tell you the truth, I think you go along with details too much. Lay it all out but keep in mind that you need to talk more than describe. You also might want to form how characters are personality-wise. I have no idea where 'Dias' is coming from so I wouldn't know how he'd react or why he is reacting the way he is.

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No! (It can't be true, though, can it?

Eugh. So graphic. =_= A bit of an odd chapter, I thought, since its main aim seems to be to develop a bit more on Dais' character, but it makes it seem like there is still loads to come.

Quite a change from what had recently happened, you focused a lot more on the characters. I found this chapter to be really good, actually. ^_^ You brought across their thoughts and feelings well.

The reader seems to need to have a good memory for this story because you're referring to events from so long ago. ^^; Although I had wondered what the consequence of that would have been...
Good change with Dais' character from what happened in the previous chapter, his absence was quite effective, although I do think that the others were a bit cheerful for after such a brutal event.

O_O Woah, that was pretty epic. You fitted so much into that. You could have split it into two to make the lengths of your chapters more consistent, but that doesn't really matter. Nice introduction to the village from Dais' perspective, and learning about the villagers a little and the overall atmosphere was good too, because it made the latter part of the chapter more effective. I think that if you had briefly described the expressions on everybody else's faces when Dais looks at them after doing what he did it would have given a better idea of everybody's reaction at the time. It would have been a pretty big shock, ne? ^_^
I expect quite a big impact on Dais' personality after this...

Ah, I had to read that last half a second time to fully understand where she had come from. ^^; It's more of a linking chapter, this one, and pretty short too. Maybe you could have used this chance for a quick scene for more characterisation?

Dais is too much of a know-it-all.

That was quite a shocking opening, even though I have no real idea of who it was. ^^; Plus the threesome thing is going quite the distance. Hehe. Personally I thought Aurai was way too calm about what had just happened in the previous chapter, especially after that fit of rage. Same with Kaia and Keri in this chapter.

Woah. That was another pretty amazing chapter. The detail near the end was so good, and you showed Aurai's anger really well. I think that if we had known more about her parents, then it would have been more emotional, we would have a better idea of how Aurai would have been feeling. She hadn't mentioned anything about them at all before.

Some funny lines in this, and good detail with the characters' smaller movements. And finally, Dais has a quirk; he's been pretty much the serious-hero guy up until now. You managed to bring across his child-like eagerness quite successfully. You might want to add more to do with location. I had completely forgotten that they were in a cavern. ^^;
Maybe this chapter could have done with being a bit longer. Your later chapters have been quite strong because you had an event in the story line to focus on.

Another break from Dais and co. Well timed after what happened in the previous chapter. I like the use of first person, and it's quite clear when you change perspective. You convey their feelings in a very effective way because of thi. But such a bastard... don't like him. >_

No! I liked him... Anyway. The fight scenes in this chapter are incredible. You use such a wide range of vocabulary that it is always different, and yet you still manage to specifically bring everything across. Dais seems to get knocked out quite often...

Some more great descriptive work here. ^_^ A bit disturbing how Dais can have two girls at the same time and an old hermit is allowed to watch. O_o I think with the woodsman, you could have changed the way he spoke, like added a dialect where he dropped his h's, or given him a strange wuirk or something to make him a bit more unique.