The repeating line is good, but why are you calling the incense "feather"? That's the only thing I see here...again, very vividly written. so far, I can 'see' everything you write, good job.

Ok, this time I won't feel stupid for thinking it's sexy, cos I am pretty sure that was the intent! LOL! Very sensual. Nice job linking the feather and incense, since they both correspond to the air aspect. If you wanted to make the entire poem fitting, fire would have worked better, as it is the element of passion.
I am guessing the feather and the incense have personal meanings...?