this story was great. I can't believe that it is over. I wish that there was more.

like i said, sudden, but interesting.

:) CD

er... sudden much? but otherwise interesting and ok.

:) CD

Um..I like it.
I do have to say...it starts out pretty well. I don't think it starts out slow...It caught me within the first paragraph, so... It's good from the beginning.
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This is turning into a very interesting story. I like it.

nice story. love your plot and characters. everything ran out smoothly. your title was very eye-catching too. good job. _

You have some revision to do in the first few paragraphs. Read it out loud and you'll see what I mean.