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| Earthsong12 2005-09-11 ch 1,  | abuseWow, neat! Very emotional and it rhymes too! Impressive job. |
| poetic abortion 2005-01-18 ch 1, | abuseAn amazing and deep song. You are truelly gifted with words. This really touched me and had me almost start crying. The voice in this poem speaks to me and leaves me just stunned in silence. A beautiful son that won't get out of my head. @_@ *hug* Thank you so much for the reviews !! You seem like a very sweet annd nice person. ^-^ Really you do. Never stop writing or I will start crying. ;_; *hugs* ^-^ ~* Noelle *~ |
| Actuated Starla 2004-11-03 ch 1, | abuse"in solitude’s arms, emptiness is all i feel the bliss and the peace once found in this place " Those two line speak to me so clearly. This is beautifully written. Well Done. |
| Anjeni Windsinger 2004-05-01 ch 1, | abuseBeautifully written, you give a really good sense of that 'cold' feeling. Loved the words you chose and how they worked with each other... and how they rhymed. A bit haunting, but I love it anyway. Very well done! |
| Elenalda 2004-04-17 ch 1, | abuseI love your line "all my world is stained with rust crimsoned innocence, dead quiescence" Probably because I don't know what quiescence means. This is a great piece, you captured the longing just right. |
| ChaoxAngel 2004-04-08 ch 1, | abuseBreath-takingly Beautiful... SO GOOD! ~>. |
| Eirien 2004-04-05 ch 1, | abuseYou've got some really great imagery in here, such as "shattered by my internal violence", "the ruthless rain", "all my world is stained with rust crimsoned innocence". The last line of the chorus reminded me a bit of Evanescence's "My Immortal". Overall a good song. |
| Hershey249 2004-04-01 ch 1, | abuseI get the feeling you were depressed when you wrote this. ^_^() Anyway, I like how you're using interesting words to rhyme, it's not often that you can rhyme something with "quiescence." :P I like the chorus for some reason I can't quite put my finger on...maybe it's just that the words have a nice flow, and the imagery is good. I also liked the second verse best out of the, simply because of the inference that being cold will never set you straight again...or maybe i'm interpreting stuff that's not there. :P I have a tendency to do that sometimes. Either way, I still like this. Good for a tune; make one up. :) |
| Getuie 2004-03-27 ch 1, | abuseSad, but beautifully written. First stanza is definitely my favourite and those first for lines just draw you in immediately. |
| torn-edges 2004-03-16 ch 1, | abusesweet. this piece really touched my heart. |
| PheonixSlayer 2004-02-16 ch 1, | abusegreat imagery and really touching |
| Needa S 2004-02-15 ch 1, | abuseWonderful job..Keep up the awesome work! |
| PainKiller 2004-02-08 ch 1, | abuseWow... you just get better and better and better and better... The ryhme scheme here was really amazing, and the tone was great and the piece really flowed along. 'all my world is stained with rust crimsoned innocence, dead quiescence heart black, call me back to dust my soul lost now as is your presence nothing¡¦s ethereal in what i see no hope in my life¡¦s reality' That is an insane verse, and I was so in awe when I read that. In fact, I'm going to stick this in my favorites, this is so good. Great work; God bless! |
| CoolBeans18s 2004-02-07 ch 1, | abuseThis is so beautiful, so amazing, ... this really touched something in me. I loved you word choice, the rhythm, how vivid your emotions were... And I especially loved the line "if only the cold could numb the pain". This is a really powerful piece ~ CoolBeans18s |
| LondonGoth17 2004-02-07 ch 1, | abuseI love the bridge, and the chorus. Get job!! |