Cool poem! I realize this is an old poem, but I was searching around and found it. I don't even know if you're still on fictionpress anymore (I have to check out your profile), but this was amazing. Great use of alliteration. That just blows me away. And some of your metaphors are pretty cool, too. Keep writing! :)

I understand why this is on so many people's favorites- it's magnetizing, it's hypnotic and I too have fallen in love with it!

Kind of long, but...wow. It's a cliche to say I'm impressed by your work, so I won't say it. The first two lines grabbed me and wouldn't let go. It's so visual - just the second line makes you think of the person/situation as a wadded up gum wrapper on the bottom of your shoe. And the rose-tinted salvation sent a light off in my head, thinking about how someone like this probably would dream of a place to call their own, and how small yet un-innocent they are...The New Orleans bit is my favorite; the best. It's in the middle of this all, true, but I think it sums up the entire poem right there. Sorry for my rambling, but you've inspired me.

I couldn't resist. I *had* to review this again. I just read this poem again. And again and again and again. ...and it finally sunk in. (yeah, I know I'm slow ._.') All I can say now is...
HOLY !$()&%(#()$*%@(#*%(^&@*$)#!
OH. OH MY GODS. This is fantastic. Amazing. The...the words! and the images! and...and...*spaz* "layers of highways and triple-dog-dares"...it's...beautiful! and wonderful! and...and...*dies* I just wanted you to know that this has affected me...changed me, even. I sometimes wonder why I put certain pieces on my faves list...works like these that take a while to sink in...it almost seems like a whim, the way I add some things. But it's NOT. I *see* things in these works...somehow, I recognize the raw awesome talent. ...So then, I'll go back and read them all again and go all twitchy over their wonderfulness. Bleh. Go me. *does a happy dance* XD
-Arii ._0

This is beautiful. A mix and tumble of words...I need to absorb them all. It gave me flashes of images and alleyways and dirt...this is classic:
"...that's what you do: the dangerous
we'll find out
if even alleycats have nine lives."
Wonderful way to sum things up...gods, there are so many great lines in here that jump at me..."another lifetime called you queen and of what?" Ah...*sighs* Awesome work.
-Arii ._o
P.S. Yeah...this is definitely on my faves. And if you could check out some of my stuff too...that would be reallyreally cool. ^_^

Unbelievable. This gives such an amazing, desolate picture. The word choice is so wonderful and powerful and yay. I normally don't enjoy longer poems, but you've managed to keep everything flowing and not have it be bogged down by extra... stuff. Just a few minor mistakes: closest might be closer, there's to there're, rising higher still to you seem to rise higher still than. But this is really perfect, like a flash of a photograph.
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