 Kelpylion 2004-03-21 . chapter 1Oh, I love the morbid/optimistic tone, the form, the rhythm, the semi-rhyme, the dark-beautiful imagery...*melts* Especially the '(transitive verb) me' last lines, which are so...quiet-soft in their rhythm/rhyme, rather than harsh and obvious. I muchly love...well-crafted. |
 carmice3 2004-02-01 . chapter 1Regrettably, I don't understand the subtleties. However, it has a nice flow and is weird enough to be attractive regardless. The repeating "me" works. That really surprised me; repetition almost always fails terribly.
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