The summary of this story WINS. It gets

ohmygosh! that was an awesome ending. never expected that.
this was good stuff. dusty erias... hahahah. thats great. and i liked your vocabulary. and the name was really fun too.
there were three mistakes i caught:
first line: needs to be 'shifted.'
last sentence of the first paragraph in the diary entry: 'don't' needs to be 'doesn't'
'Dogs barked and howled along enthusiastically to some depressed teenager's extremely bad poetry about how much they missed their home and were going to kill themselves.' - 'how they were going to...'??
anyway.. those were tiny things and i felt like being picky so i was picky. overall though, i thought this was fun. keep writing. bye.

Broderbund... ::snckers::
This was good. A little strange, but, good nonetheless. Not muc to say about it, negatively or positively.

HAHAHA! That was so funny! It was so fun to read! Of course I gpt the humour and detial faster becasue I own a Mac at home, and we both know how Macs increase all the positive skills and emotions!!
I love the twist, and the detail, and the new words ::claps:: yAy!
It reminded me of early text adventures - the great ones!!
Good job! (you should consider doing a text adventure!) P.S. I wish I could write fun funny stuff like this!!

Took me a bit of time to read but I liked it. It brought me in. I don't remember any mistakes, but I could be wrong. Please review my stuff too.