|Reviews for Animals of the Future|
| Mr. Singh is back 9/24/05 . chapter 1
Couple things. I can't tell if you are presenting a realist/pessimist view of the reality of master vs. animal, or if you are attempting to speak out against it.
Next thing. The human race would never allow itself to become domesticated as pets, no matter how much greater any foreign stranger is. We would either linger incessantly in hopeless revolution, or simply die. The reason humans cannot be mastered as pets as other beings can is because humans are the only known species in the world that can think beyond instinct. As for master of earth and terrain goes, the same rule applies. Because of greater known intellect, humans can manipulate nature because we can make choices which are not bound to nature. I think the only kind of being capable of looking down on humans as pets are those that would be free of the imperfections of humans, such as land and animal enslavement and the gluttonous waste of natural resources.
I would say that if you believe that humans can potentially be looked down upon as pets, it can be done only by some kind of supreme being which may or may not exist. (Think about it. Why would any god create an earth with freewilled beings for any reason other than entertainment similar to the kind that we get from our pets? Does not every "god" invented by man want us to worship them as we wish our pets to worship us?)
Can't really say that I agree with this essay in any way, but you presented your point clearly, persuasively, and in an entertaining and enjoyable format, and that deserves points.
| temblance 9/2/05 . chapter 1
You know, I tried writing a story once about animals taking over the world and all humans were forced to become "pets" or servants, and this reminded me of it. I enjoyed reading this, becuase it provokes a lot of thought. I've always wondered what it will be like in the future, and this almost reflects my sentiments. Good job.
| Gilee7 10/5/04 . chapter 1
Very good. Very cool idea. It's not the greatest piece in the world, but it's very entertaining, very enjoyable. One thing I had a problem with (and it's not really a problem, just something that stood out to me) was that when the narrator is describing the pets we have now, he always uses he and him to talk about them, as if nobody has a female pet or something. I found that kinda weird. But overall this is a pretty good story, very thought-provoking. Good job!
| PaganScribe 7/23/04 . chapter 1
| Slightly Bent Halo 7/18/04 . chapter 1
oh, interesting train of thought... if i ever have a pet i'm going to get it from the rspca (animal shelter)
that's where we got our family dog, buddah, and he's so cute!
he was only 1 and he was at the shelter coz his owner was in jail or something and no one looked after him. we've had him for like 4 years now...
| Alex Murphy 2/15/04 . chapter 1
Okay, I prommised you that I would come back to you if you fixed the format, and so here I am.
To me, it seems to be a mix between a school lecture and what feels like a jounal entry. And by mix, I don't mean a fluid blend, rather a jerky alternation between the two styles.
Seems like one moment, your author is ignorant and accepts their fate, and then suddenly they are lecturing us about animal self awareness.
This is a message from the future to the past. Your author feels like they are writting from originating of the present, from the future, warning the past. It just didn't sit well with me.
I liked the concept and the tone. You did very well in creating that bleek, "You have been warned" kind of taint to the message. Pretty kewl.
| DrenchedDrumTech 2/14/04 . chapter 1
| Stone Feather 2/11/04 . chapter 1
Oh, wow. That was great. I love the idea behind it, and it's true.
| RedSeven 2/11/04 . chapter 1
Interesting and thought-provoking indeed! However, the sci-fi part of my brain wishes to point out that, unlike dogs or cats or any other animal on Earth for that matter, humans are a sentient species. If aliens were to come along, we'd probably be more useful to them as slave labor than pets...But that's a typical scenario, and yours is a refreshing approach.
| sandbag 2/11/04 . chapter 1
Woah.. Very nice... Really good short story... wow...
| lioness2004 2/10/04 . chapter 1
I felt so moved by your story. It was excellent, Keep up the great work! Never stop writing only stop when you've reached the sun.
| I am tabitha 2/4/04 . chapter 1
This is great so far I really like it & can't wait 4 more
| Eads JA 2/3/04 . chapter 1
I took one look at this and said no.
Format your work.
Paragraphs are good.
If your document doesnt translate well over to the fictionpress page format, do what many writters have done, put an extra space between paragraphs so it comes out in block style and it's eisier to spot em.
Change it, and I'll come back to you... You'll also get more readers that way.
| Lauren K 2/3/04 . chapter 1
I totally agree with this! It's sort of chilling, looking at it from this point of view. V. good! It would be easier to read if it was expanded into paragraphs, instead of just a big block of writing. Also, it would totally rock if this was expanded into a STORY, instead of just a sort of essay/story. I think there's a lot more that could be added to make a really interesting story.