wow. 116 stories. and you're reviewing your own story.

you obviously have no social life.

hm...sending a review to myself. i MUST be borED...

I like the essence you gave off, and you're writing isn't bad. Perhaps next time you could write something more original? I'd like to read that.
One problem, the way you began it with "Once upon a time"... maybe not right for this type of story?
I dunno, good work, thanks for sharing.