Is this story supposed to be about anything in particular? All I really comprehended was sleep...blah blah blah...dreams...blah blah blah...memory...blah blah blah...nightmare...blah blah blah...sleep... The grammar is pretty messed up as well, which makes it even harder to follow. Is this supposed to be like the ravings of someone driven insane by insomnia or psychedelic drugs or something, to the point where they can't even write properly? If so you should either make it way shorter, or add some more vivid hallucination-type images to make it more interesting. It's bad enough for a story to be either boring OR confusing; this is both at the same time.

Oh, creepy. Not to say it wasn't good, just... oh, scary! I'm totally getting nightmares from this. I liked it because (lol, I just read Werecat99's review guide thing- I see you read it too; that's where I found the link to this) it was original and interesting; it really held my attention. Good work and keep writing!

I enjoyed this story Nick, you have a creative imagination and a unique way of expressing your thoughts in a way that makes for a compelling read! Don't let negative people with hateful agendas keep you from posting your stories here at fictionpress or elsewhere! There are lots of folks here that enjoy reading your work and I am only one of many! This jerk that's harrassing you needs to get a life!

Here's my pledge to you, Nicky: each time you take down the review I leave for your story, I will return the following day and post it again. Either gain control of Fictionpress and ban reviews, or be prepared to spend a lot of time taking down reviews that don't praise your collection of misspelled words. Here's my review: this was terrible. Learn to spell first, then learn how to write. Hope that helps!

Well, I loved this story. Nick, I haven't read any of your work before, but this one is something special. I see someone here is writing bad things about your writing; this story shines through; this story cannot be made fun of. Wow, when I've calmed down a little, I am going to read everything you've written. Thank you for scaring the living crap out of me!

Greetings!
I've just got around to reading this particular story ( a day or so ago ), kind of odd too because I have been wanting to read it for quite some time. Stories like these are really the kind of stories that I really yearn for, the kind that generates a little taste of insanity within the readers mind. Kudos on this story, it's extremely hard to understand sometimes but I think that's the beauty of it, the mind is a hard thing to grasp sometimes too with all of it's levels and chambers. I'm looking forward to "The Requiem Gazette" anthology. It feels great to be making progress.

I never did review this one, but here it is now. It's got a pretty scary ending to think about, wow, that's something that would keep alot of people awake. And it's style sounds very old fashioned, sort of on the gothic side. The only issue is some things with how some sentences are put together may not make sense at first, but it's good!

Hello Hello!
Well, this was definitely different from my usual fare, but not bad. ACtually, it was pretty good. Your sentence structure is a little confusing in a few spots, it took some getting used to. Good though. Make sure to use variety in your words. Some phrases are just repeated over and over, so try some variation. No real problems. Maybe missing a few commas, but then I usually have fifteen extra in a sentence. Really good. I'm going to go now because I'm actually supposed to be researching a school paper. Ta!
Gata de la Noche

This was very awesome! I read a lot of what you have done... All good... i just wanted to post one review so i figured i would read from top to bottom and review the very top one. So that is the thing i have done. Any ways, thanks for the awesome review of my story! You are helping my confidence and now i can easily write the second chapter... and third... and fourth... etc... Keep in touch with my pen name... I'll have the nesxt chapter out sometime later this week or early on next week.
Later
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well, this piece of writing has certainly got mixed reviews. I personally enjoyed reading it. Yeah, it had a ton of grammatical errors (which i'll try to go over in a little) but it's very creative. The narrative voice in particular is fascinating, though not truly original. (who actually has an original narrative voice? Even the best current day authors tend to sound like someone that came before them. Only once in a great while will you find a truly original voice.) Your word choice is pretty off and on, sometimes you'll use a word that just seems perfect and sometimes you'll use a word that doesn't make too much sense. No big deal, but you might want to look a little closer when writing to fix some of the more unusual things. You tend to repeat some basic words over and over in a sentence, this is redundant but not too hard to fix. So, like the previous problem, you should just look a little closer when editing or writing to prevent the redundancies from occuring. Your ideas are really cool, but alot of the time basic things like the stuff i just said drowned out the underlying ideas and leave a reader feeling frustrated.
Now onto the good points. I've already told you about the narrative voice, reminds me alot of Poe. This is good as most of the people on here try to sound like Tolkien or Steven King which gets tiring very quickly (especially when the poetry is emmulating them- BLECH.) The way you mention the same events over and over, slowly building the events in the readers head is also interesting. Some readers may find this recurring of events redundant, but i think that's mostly because of the afforementioned redundancies in your grammar which, unfortunately, lead people the wrong way. I'm starting to get redundant myself so i'll stop here.
Thanks for reviewing my work, it's greatly appreciated. Feel free to review more if you want and tell me if you would like more reviews from me. (I try to give only one per author because some people have found my way of reviewing hurtfull. I personally don't understand this concept as the only reason i can think of posting on here is for the betterment of ones skills through the criticism of peers. But hey, whatever floats a persons boat, right?)

Erm, why did you suddenly feel the need to review my poem? (Which didn't seem to make sense to me) It's not your style. Is it because I was mean to your buddy Whispers? You don't write poetry, nor do you rate it. At least of what poetry I've read on this site. By the way, two wrongs don't make a right, and I already had a talk with Whispers and I resolved to be "nicer." I know, what a shock. Lastly, I know I don't have any aptitude for writing poetry, I just wrote that just for laughs.

Don't pay attention to these Grammar Nazi **, who can't seem to write, punctuate, or spell much better than any of the rest of us. **, dude! Going in my faves right alongside the Cabbie Homicide.

Pst.
Shamelessly sucking off Brian Lumley and the ghost of H.P. Lovecraft isn't the way to go for a serious writing career.
Just wanted to letcha know.

You really need to work on your grammar. This story is a horrible abuse of the English language. If it's an attempt to sound antiquated, then you've failed at that, too. You don't seem to understand the proper use of prepositions and determiners, and you just stuff as many as you can into each sentence in a way that makes no sense whatsoever. You get an F.

Wow-
I think my english teacher would gave you an A for this.
Detail, and descriptions. Very dark, and that it was I like in stories, and essays.
Whispers In SHadows