nice analogy! Good job with the repetition.

Nice metaphor.
-God bless-

amzing prayer. i think everyone who is spiritual, or christian, says something like that at least once.

This had a nice flow to it, and a good message. The only problem was, the repetition, which you normally do so well, was just a little over-used, and I found myself looking for a little variety; it's not a bad poem, but it's not nearly as good as 'Like A Rose', or 'Red Clouds'.
P.S - Thanks for letting me record 'Like A Rose' with you; it was a privilege, an honor, AND a huge blessing. :o)