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fontanellemonster 2005-12-29 . chapter 1
wow. that's awesome. the positioning and choice of words is great, and the concept really makes you think. in some ways the language feels aggresively masculine and patriarchal, describing the female as some passive creature to be moulded, but something about the beauty of it counters that...great work.
wordsworth in a garbage can 2005-02-06 . chapter 1
delicately destructive? let's keep with the haiku theme. I don't know much about haikus, but I do like yours, that is all.
featherlight 2004-03-17 . chapter 1
So sad, but lovely all the same. I liked the second line best.
bach-player 2004-03-06 . chapter 1
i like your use of language "seropositive petals"...very creative!
Lina Inverse 2004-02-16 . chapter 1
Interesting and sad... What does "seropositive" mean, by the way?
godawful teen-angst poetry 2004-02-16 . chapter 1
not poetry? i quiver to think what you term the rest of our work. ^^
lovely lovely lovely. and awesome. i love those stories about court ladies who used sex as a leverage tool for just about everything...things were so much more interesting back then. sigh. i love the word seropositive. yay for creativity, and intelligence. and enough self-degradation. nice to see you back!
~lyv
Plato's Optic Runaway 2004-02-10 . chapter 1
MM...another of your flawless haikus. You are correct in saying that a haiku cannot possess foibles; and I assure you yours do not. Lovely, dear, simply lovely. I know a number of people who can learn from this.
YesIAmKanthak 2004-02-09 . chapter 1
Another great haiku. The posible uses of sexuality to destroy are too numerous to list. Just look back at history and you may see half.
breakdown in the waiting room 2004-02-07 . chapter 1
Seems I'm the only one so far that gets it.
I like it. "seropositive." Like that word. "Perfected weapon." Love it!
-Jessica
Tatterdemalion 2004-02-07 . chapter 1
Urgg. Nasty topic.
And also, yes... clever wording and that, nice use of a cliche etc, but I'm personally none too keen on it.
Hail the Warrior 2004-02-07 . chapter 1
It didn't get the message across to me...oh well.
HtW
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