Yay! I love it!

Great story (well first chpter at least)!

Ooh...cool...Story's going great so far! Please update soon...

You have a really nice start going, I'd definitely say write some more on it. Your first paragraph is kind of confusing, though, you need to clarify some parts. Other than that, I really like this. Update soon!

I love it! It just sounds so realistic!

ahh a cliffhanger! update soon!

Wow...A couple of small flaws in the paragraph building, but nothing you can't fix. Quite good so far, I'll continue to review! Keep it up.

Oh wow. I can't wait to read more of this. You are a very talented writer.

It was good. More?

sounds like a cool story just reading the beginning u know. plz update soon.

Very well expressed in first-person, is that your forte? Keep it up!