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| Breaking Heart 2004-05-28 ch 1,   | yeah.i really did enjoy reading this.it's a really good start.keep it up. your irish lover |
| RuathaWehrling 2004-05-26 ch 1, | Hi there! Thanks for your great reviews! I'll read something longer later tonight, but this one caught my eye. I really like the message and the way your say it. Two things: 1.) "There are solutions, though they're just, / Waiting to be found." -- Do you mean "just waiting to be found", or "they're just. Waiting to be found..."? They're two different meanings and you might want to be clearer as to which you mean! 2.) "Each and everyone helping you..." -- It looks kind of funny. I'd suggest "Each and every one..." just for parallelism. Kind of picky, but part of poetry is visualism, too! Beyond those two picky little things, this is awesome! :) Ruatha |
| ZiggyGurl 2004-03-25 ch 1, | I liked this, although I had to read it a few times to really get what you were saying. I've read a few pieces of your work before. Your really good, keep writing. |
| Rachel 2004-02-26 ch 1, | Wow. That was good... like a rhyming dictionary is good. First of all, I'd like to point out that you misspelled friend, which is something a first grader commonly does. Forgive me if you really are a first grader, because it appears so in your writing. By second grade, I'm sure you'll be able to work past all your cliches. I suggest you reread this, and then print it out and burn it. The possibility was there, but you killed it when you rhymed "unbeckoned" with "second". P.S.: This sucks. |
| Fast Food Fantasy 2004-02-21 ch 1, | i really like the last three lines... don't really know why... i (of course) like the whole poem in general. |
| DreamNightmare 2004-02-08 ch 1, | this makes u think...damn u! its too EARLY ugh lol but yea great song lyl late DreamNightmare |
| Haz Almighty 2004-02-08 ch 1, | hi, im not sure about this song , i dnt like it as much as filler. im not sure y im just not as keen on it. anyway god work i hope u write more stuff soon |