Yay! Update!Nice one, I love Julia's character =^.^=And the plot thickens! *dun dun dun* awesome! I gotta update my stuff... =0.0=Keep writing! Nicely done!~Pont

Hi! Yes, I finally got a chance to submit a review to you. This last update was an awesomeone. Very vivid descriptions with the comparisons. The bolts of lightning compared to the impact of Beitiouwuen's words on his father was an excellent one. I also really liked the dream and the description of what happened when he was given the seal. I was a little confused at the beginning of the dream though, because you haven't introduced the dream part of the story for so long that I forgot there was one. At the end of the second to last chapter Beitiouwuen was in the piano room, when did he transfer to his bed and dream? From what I could tell he was still in the piano room and decided to go out to this strange temple. I think you need to work a bit on your transitions from one chapter to the next one. As far as critiques go, the grammer is getting much better, but there are still a few things I would change. I will email you with the specifics. Other than that, great job!

Hehehehe! i LOVE this chappie! the phrasing of the writing in julia's notebook is a little bit awkward; if you were her, what would you write? It's just a little random, I suggest you make it into a diary entry or something. Aki is great... a little ooc when he was threatening poor beitiouwuen, but whatever
yeah, changing beitiouwuen to beitiouwuen was a great idea, but i suggest you give him a shorter name. a little overwhelming to type, and a mouthfull to say.
love this! you're awesome annie! i love my barbaric girlfriend! (the STORY you bakas)
you may want to explain the whole using the last name thing, for people who arent japanese-smart.
keep updating! (think you're getting the hang of this) AND DRAWING! you're awesome!
ja