 dawningfear 2004-04-18 . chapter 1I love the wordplay, but I really dislike the single rhyme. If you replaced 'fear' by any other word, this would be awesome. I still like it because of the wordplay, and the two following stanzas are nice and neat. However that one rhyme grates against the ear. I like this better than some of your other pieces though. Keep on. |