Aww, Tristan seems to really care about her...lol. Though I'm not sure what Zuraya's feeling...this perspective doesn't exactly help making bonds with characters, but I'll make do with what there is. I like it though, not sure why...

This was a good one though, even if it was short. Hopefully I'll be able to read more soon, I'll make sure when I update a story I come and read this, lol. Whenever that may be.

Ciao!

I had some free time today and so I decided to read this, lol. I've missed it, it really is quite good :) Hehe, when Zuraya said to Tristan 'Why don't we get to know each other a little more...' I was like 'What?' Lol, and then I read on and calmed down a little...I'm just feeling the need to be silly today! Anyway this was an interesting little chapter. Though I wonder when and if Zuraya will tell Tristan who her father is.

Anyway I'm gonna read the next chapter, this was good!

I knew she was the Key! Well I had a feeling :) Ahh, now I'm thinking of Buffy, you know how Buffy's sister was the Key? Lol. Yeh, that's random but I just kind of thought of it now!

Tristan and Tao are brothers? Wowie! lol. And who is Trisana? Ooh Mystery! Hehe!

Hmm, anyway this would be so much better with a little more description...see? I can read this and imagine what these fantastical placed look like, but I doubt its anything like you intended them to be mentally invisioned (or envisioned w/e).

I think your writing style would annoy a lot of people, but of it as you telling me a story lol as in you witnessed it all and your retelling it all to me, then I don't mind at all. Its very good! Just a little unconventional...which is good sometimes!

Another long review...sorry about that >

Yeh, I couldn't be asked to sign in as Tasha today, Lol.

Anyway this chapter was okay. The fact that no one says Seiren's name reminded me of Harry Potter (plus the fact that he's called the 'Dark Lord'), you know how no one wants to (or at least has the guts to) say Voldemorts name? And it's frowned upon...? Yeah, I know its kind of annoying to have your story compared to another, especially Harry Potter which is just so... i dunno the word but, its annoying being compared to another story -but I couldn't help it. So sorry :)

Yay 4 Tristan, I don't know if he's going to be a main character but I like the name... ^_^! I'm guessing he's going to be with Zuraya for a while though?

Another Good Chapter, though I wish some of the names and places were a little easier to say :( Some of the names of people are a little hard to say and pronounce...and I'm sure I'm going to have difficulty remembering who's who. But I think I have the main ones memorised already...hopefully I'll be okay and I won't have a brain overload :) That's pretty easy to happen...

Sorry for the long review which had kind of gone on a bit...o_0

I'll be reviewing this sporadically so don't think I've forgotten if I leave it for a while! o_0 I have so many chapters to read! hehe!

Cya!

BTW, I don't mind the tense your using...I think its okay but not many stories use this tense, and I've never tried to write in this tense...I think I'd confuse myself or something :) I think its great that you managed to though.

Hmm, and this story is moving a little fast but not that I mind...I think I'm understanding what's going on! And Zuraya is Seiren's daughter?! Okay...

Anyway, I think this story seems SO unlike you, Lol. I don't know...like a totally different person wrote it? But it was written some time ago...

Anyway I'll read more soon!

Ciao!

Wow, this was a lot of information packed into one chapter, but I think I got most of it. I'm not usually fond of Fantasy but I thought, why not? Lol. Since it's you! Um, yes, anyway this was a good first chapter though some of the sentences in the beginning seemeed a little short and abrupt? And it did seem to move very fast - but apart from that it was an interesting first chapter!

Sam, great story. I think this would have a good next chapter. Have a good time at collage.

Dear S.S. Dailey,

You know I love this story. Can't wait to read the rest of the sequel.

LYLAS, SaxGirl

I read it here and there and promise will complete it but I have trouble accepting the name cities when you're talking about elves. It is a modern term that was only acquired with the coming of the Romans who, despite everyone admiring them etc., were the first to perpetuate a grand scale environmental disaster. The term city would not be very appropriate if we consider the traditional view of Elves. Second thing is that I have trouble reading stories that are almost entirely made up of dialogues, you're not the only one don't worry and I'm not saying you should even listen to me, but for me novels, tales etc. must have a lot of description so that the gaps can be filled and larger horizons can be presented to the reader. Apart from these two things I must say I'm enjoying the story ;)

keltica, the celtic fire from within

i love this story! will zuraya ever come back to her senses? update soon pleaz!

S-
Good story, the only thing I would fix would maybe be some word choices & grammar/punctuation!
-P

This is just my opinion, but I don't like the format you have it in, youre in like the fourth person, or something. If this is a script or something than that's okay, but otherwise, it gets really boring. Sounds cool though, just put it in the view of the main character or something instead.