I enjoyed reading your unique style, how you delved into the subject and twisted about to see every point of view. Not many people have that ability, so it is always inspiring to see others achieve the wondrous state.
One thing I would recommend is to use language that is more active. Include less-- was, were, have, has, had, etc. Passive voice has the unfortunate ability to take out some power of words, leaving you only with a shadow of their true intensity.
In addition, “Only then would I feel the absent self-esteem which is rightfully validated by the self,” when you say, “by the self,” it contrasts with your earlier, more familiar and first person voice.
Another thing that I’ve caught is some of your words are misspelled, be sure to run a spellchecker or read or stuff aloud before submitting.

Wow...deep. I liked that very much but- forgive me if I sound like a complete pleb- it's a bit heavy. Don't get me wrong, I loved it. It's just sometimes I felt a bit bowled over by the- well- denseness of it. I very much liked the phrase "It was not sown into my fleshut that's just me." very striking image, I found.

Hmm...such an inspring piece! I see you have found some inspirtaion somewhere conisidering you have written 2 things in less then a week! Rock on! *Ahem* Anyway, this was (as always) a wonderful piece. It saddened me a little though, that no one ever wants to listen or trust you with responsbitly. Alas, it is with every young adult that they do not have the right to be heard and known. You maternal figure as the sea...very interesting. Use her to douse out your mothers flames then! Just kidding...sorry about thsi review...just me babbling since I am not in a good mood. Please email me, I really want to talk to you, okay?
Keep writing and with love,
-Seras