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| ever.dream.of.me.please 2004-03-06 ch 1,  | abuse*claps* Well done! I like it! I'm looking forward to more soon. |
| tangible mandible 2004-02-11 ch 1, | abuseYour formatting made this a little confusing, but the story line was great. You've got good descriptions, but if I were you I'd get into Arlice's head a little more. What was he thinking as all this happened? Otherwise, good job. Write more soon! |
| midnightdreamsforever 2004-02-11 ch 1, | abuseUm... its a good story, but without the paragraphing it kinda lost me towards the end. Could you please sort out the last paragraph because its huge, and make reading difficult... |