This poem does ryhm a lot and I applaude you for taking the time and efort to think of the ryhmes. This was, to me, an anger filled poem about love but that is what I waws hinting at. I'm not sure if that is what it was about but I really liked it although what I believe it was about wasn't too pretty of a subject.

I luv the ryhme sceme! And its such a fully packed poem it can mean so many things. yet i can tell they all link to some thing... not quite sure what tho... lol all ur poems leave the reader to wonder! NICE! ~TRW

"Now refrain the hurricane caused by strawberry novocaine"
Brilliant. This is going on my favorites.

I just wonder if you're talking about yourself or someone else. Or maybe both. Loved the seeming randomness. I love poems written like a puzzle.

wow, another great poem! i esp. liked the line "Now refrain the hurricane caused by strawberry novocaine" and i thought the whole rhyming scheme was unique, and even though it was long it really kept me hooked!

Hehehe I liked this. It was so fun! Kepy me hooked. Thanks for your words. They're great!
Sterces
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The rhymes were overwhelming...but I liked it a lot. I loved the way it rhymed actually, it was so forebearing and claustrophobia-inducing.

Daamn, Im so in love with this poem, "Now refrain the hurricane caused by strawberry novocaine" Such an awesome line. I love how each line rhymes with other words in the line, I cant seem to be able to do that *jealous* this is so creative and so orignal, *love this*

The rain in Spain falls mainly on the the plains...
*cough* ahem.
nice poem.

Great rhymes!
*lime-girl*

What? this was...what? the rhyme scheme was bizzare, and i didn't know what i was reading about but i couldn't stop reading anyway, it drew me in, it held me, and i'm not sure, there was just something so haunting about the way it flew, nice one, really, haunting
Kenzie

good god this is gorgeous! ::claps:: your talent is getting scary now! In a good way *grins* I love how you keep up the triple (or more) rhyme scheme throughout the poem. AND i saw meaning too! I think I understand.
May I voice my inspiration? the fox/box line. Instead of "sound asleep" I thought of "Deaf to alarm clocks" then "Silencing alarm clocks: then "Tick off tick-tocks" I know ... stupid. I LOVE this! Lucious like strawberry icecream!!

I love the rhyming in each line. Very thought provoking.

This is completely excellent. ^_^ Totally great. I love the way it's written, with all the rhymes and stuff. :):) GREAT JOB!