Simple. I like it. Especially the ending.

This was really good. Not loaded... yet filled with all of John's thoughts.

Lovely.

Sukanya

Yum, yum. I loved it. Freaking genius, that's what you are! I loved it. Hmm, I don't even care about Lisa much, but she better not break his heart.

This was a really good story. I liked how you ended it. The ending fits the story. Great writing :)

haha, that is great:)

Aw, this story was so cute! It made me have little fuzzies inside. Not only that, but your writing style really makes it work! :)

Cute story. It definitely entertained me. Nice work.

Good luck with writing, this story, and life. Have a wonderful summer and a brilliant day.

~Twilight Starr~

Aw! Me likes it. :) Good, cozy stuff. They were so cute.

YAY! He did it! Well, he didn't ask, but he took action!

gulistanlik

omg totally so happy that there is a one-shot like this!! =)
i have a lot of guy friends, and i alwayss tell them to do somethign, they they never do... =(
so can totally understand whats happening!! yay

Cute. I like it.

I'm not sure what it is that I like more about this story, the fact that he's shy or that she's kicking butt on Mortal Kombat (which I loved to play when too, once upon a time). I love the line, I may have a penis, but it doesn't mean I'm heartless. How that evokes so many other comments in my mind! Well done.

So since you haven't updated anything for a while, I went with the complete story instead of the incomplete ones. If you update something, then I'll read that too, because based on this one, I like your writing style.

As for this story I like the theme. And even though the end did leave me wondering what happened next, it was somehow still very satisfying. I also like how you were able to get your characters across so well in such a short story. All in all a great and amusing story. Now you just have to get down some of the longer stories that you started. lol.

P.S. Thanks for the review. :)

i think this kind of story brings out your writing style the best. i've read a couple of other things you've got posted and i think this really works. yes, i know you dont plan on continuing this story, but i hope you take the time to write because you've got a lot of potential.