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| i.wont.stop.dying 2006-08-25 ch 1,   | The first line is my favourite. I don't know why but for me it just stands out from the rest of the poem. It seems like it just sets the entire flow of it and the poem could go either of two ways. It went the better way. I think the diction used is amazing for it. :) |
| Rodrigo 2004-02-11 ch 1, | A topic that is true to us all. The mirror is probably one of the best ways to start questioning yourself and reflect. You know that the image you see isn't quite what it appears to be; oftentimes it is entirely different. The simplicity of the writing is appropriate as a result. Its very true and objective without excess to boggle it down and break the flow of it. From "I've given up" to "Can't face what's right in front of me" it seems to speed up in my mind as a sign of turmoil. Then "Can't face what's right in front of me" slows it down again as almost disappointment and arguably disgust. Overall, excelelnt work. |
| dave mclean 2004-02-11 ch 1, | i really like the ending. |