Powerful, the end really hits like a hammer. With simple words and a few short lines you say so much. Great job.

The ending is the most powerful part, good enough that it pretty much slaps the reader in the face and makes sure they know that all is not well in this person's world. Everyone's lost things in their lives, but to be so utterly overwhelmed...

I dont think its ur strongest poem, but the ending is quite powerful and finished it off reli well.
gd poem
XXNerfxx

aw the end is ver unexpected and sad...

Cool! Good work my friend! Sorry i've been so long, I'm trying to change that now though :)

fantasmic my friend, totally out did urself there :)
woopee!
half term, sorry if this is pointless, but good poem!
mayb u could write one about holidays slippin away, coz this one definatly is :(
ps. and yes, this is the total loser u think it isx