nice, i like it. i figured the gift would be a hug, or "i love you", i think the charred-non-edible cake was a good idea. keep on writing (i probably won't read your stories, i'm a poetry kind of guy, and to your list of books on your bio, over half of them i have to agree).

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I love this poem! It's so cute! Is it talking aboot a cake you actually made?

Very cute! My Dad's birthday's tomorrow so I know exactly how you feel. Although I'm a horrible cook and it would turn out worse than it did in the poem so...so much for that idea!

I like this poem-which reminds me...My mom's birthday is coming up soon!

Tootles,Widow Shark

PS: Keep writing and keep smiling :).

interesting! x
much love ! hee hee i wouldnt call it theft! -funny!
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that was a really good poem. it kept me interested and the end rhyme was really good.

*laughing inwardly* This was great! When did you write this? and why? Also, if its not theft, then what is it? All in all, this was a very cute poem, and I can almost see your mom's face when she saw the cake...

aww... that's a nice gift! )

ahahahaha this is funny! me likies a lot! it has a sort of innocent humour in the verses which makes it even more hilarious _
Karasu

Cute story! I hope you don't mean yourself when you say in the poem that you're not a good writer, cause guess what? You are! Surprise! HAPPY BIRTHDAY! Oh...wait. It's not your birthday. Never mind, we won't make you a good writer...(just kidding in all of this. You're really good, I didn't know you wrote so much poetry. Bring your poems in more often, so then I don't have to write these reviews! ;), just kidding again)
In case you haven't noticed, I'm not very good at criticizing poetry. Don't worry...I'll completely dissect, overcriticize, and utterly destroy your stories with my cutting commentary! MUAHAHAHAHAHAHA! Kidding yet again, in case you didn't notice!

What a wonderfully amusing poem! *beam* So cute...so cute..sounds like something on a Hallmark card or from "A Light In the Attic."
Oh..dang it..did I already tell you that before? :-p Oh well! It's still true!

Ha,ha...oops. _ Very good - and funny. Haven't I seen this somewhere before? Line 10: writings should have an aposterphy (or however you spell that contrary word -_-) Also, the second verse has 1 less sylable on every line and it sort of messes up the beat.

Really cute, I love it! You are so sweet! _

Wow...I really like your poem! _ I'm not much of a poem writer..-_-..Keep up with the good work! :)

Aww, sweet!